Wednesday, July 6, 2011

The Eyes that See - A Prelude to the Balancer Chronicles by Chris Adonn

Okay, I have to say I am not a writer, my writing skills and grammar are atrocious! If I can find errors in your writing then it has to be bad.

I am a real stickler for typos, there is no excuse for a book to be FULL of stupid mistakes. I can understand that a few errors might slip through the cracks, but when a book is full of them it really takes away from the story for me. I mean come on, how hard is it to hit F7? Or to just proof-read for that matter. 

Even if you are self publishing, have a friend or someone look it over before you actually publish it. To me there is nothing more frustrating than to try to read a book that is full of typos, formatting issues and bad grammar. To me it shows that the author probably, for one, rushed to get their book published and/or two, didn't care enough to double check their work. Show pride in your work, check, check and check it again. 

I was given "Legacy - The Balancer Chronicles" by Chris Adonn to read and review, but I decided to read his prelude "The Eyes that See - Prelude to the Balancer Chronicles" first. Due to the amount of errors and poor writing skills I will NOT be waisting my time on the "Balancer Chronicles". 

And to Mr. Adonn, the word "ORGANIZATION" is spelled with a Z, not an S! You misspelled this word 9 times in the first two chapters! What's up with that? You did finally start spelling it correctly late in chapter 2, but made no effort to correct the first 9 errors, why? I really feel that there is no excuse for this. Your book was so full of typos and errors that it really made the writing seem childish. You had a good story in mind, but the writing made it fall apart!

Your reference to certain points didn't match up with the original statement, words were missing where words should have been, words were in places that they shouldn't have been, typos were endless... I could go on and on, but I won't. Until this book has been properly "re-worked" it will go on the "Did Not Like Pile".

Josie's Torn by Lisa Vandiver was the same way. I just don't understand how an author can work so hard to put a story together and then have it fall apart because of spelling, formatting, grammar errors and just stupid mistakes.

So please, again, if you have a story you want me to read -- PROOF-READ IT -- or I won't be reading it. There is a lot of good work out there waiting for recognition and I feel they deserve the spot-light, not writings like this.
Pinky

2 comments:

  1. I was given "Legacy - The Balancer Chronicles" by Chris Adonn to read and review, but I decided to read his prelude "The Eyes that See - Prelude to the Balancer Chronicles" first. Due to the amount of errors and poor writing skills I will NOT be waisting my time on the "Balancer Chronicles".

    And to Mr. Adonn, the word "ORGANIZATION" is spelled with a Z, not an S! You misspelled this word 9 times in the first two chapters! What's up with that? You did finally start spelling it correctly late in chapter 2, but made no effort to correct the first 9 errors, why? I really feel that there is no excuse for this. Your book was so full of typos and errors that it really made the writing seem childish. You had a good story in mind, but the writing made it fall apart!

    Your reference to certain points didn't match up with the original statement, words were missing where words should have been, words were in places that they shouldn't have been, typos were endless... I could go on and on, but I won't. Until this book has been properly "re-worked" it will go on the "Did Not Like Pile".

    Dear Pinky (Pink Maiden),

    Though I appreciate the fact that you so graciously took the time to write up a review for my Book, “Legacy” (which you requested), I am rather appalled by your basic disregard for other human beings and their feelings—not to mention the fact that you essentially posted a critique about “The eyes that See” rather than Legacy. The above passage was placed in the Legacy reviews at Smashwords. How careless of you. So I think rather than reply cordially as I do to all my constructive critics, I shall dispense the same disrespect you showed me, in my address to you.

    Firstly, organisation can be spelled with either an S or a Z, so please, do not dish out your ignorance as fact. I assume you to be an American. Right? The use of a Z instead of S is an American bastardisation of the English language and though it is now an accepted bastardisation, it is not the only way to write the word. It is my mistake to have used both Z’s and S’s, and you are not the first to point this out, but you are the most obnoxious person to have done so.

    As to why I did not correct the first nine instances of this so-called error, I can only say that I would love to—really I would (with the traditional spelling)—but I am not a proof-reader by any stretch of the imagination. I want to hire one, but finances do not allow for it at present. My main concern was getting my story out before somebody else came up with the same idea—had you read Legacy, you might’ve grasped what I’m talking about here. If you were a writer you might have understood this need, but as you are not and are also seemingly incapable of empathy, I do not expect you to appreciate this.

    Now, as I hope you have gained some understanding how hurtful if feels to be addressed a less than dignified manner, let me say this; I thank you for your critique but the abrasiveness, ignorance, and downright nastiness made it fall apart.

    This was not a helpful critique at all. Until you learn how to address the issues with diplomacy, your review will go on my “bitter little person” pile.

    Doesn’t fell good to be spoken to so callously, does it?

    Wishing you all the best,

    Chris Adonn.

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  2. Dear Pinky (Pink Maiden),

    Though I appreciate the fact that you so graciously took the time to write up a review for my Book, “Legacy” (which you requested), I am rather appalled by your basic disregard for other human beings and their feelings—not to mention the fact that you essentially posted a critique about “The eyes that See” rather than Legacy. The above passage was placed in the Legacy reviews at Smashwords. How careless of you. So I think rather than reply cordially as I do to all my constructive critics, I shall dispense the same disrespect you showed me, in my address to you.

    Firstly, organisation can be spelled with either an S or a Z, so please, do not dish out your ignorance as fact. I assume you to be an American. Right? The use of a Z instead of S is an American bastardisation of the English language and though it is now an accepted bastardisation, it is not the only way to write the word. It is my mistake to have used both Z’s and S’s, and you are not the first to point this out, but you are the most obnoxious person to have done so.

    *****I'm sorry that you think it is obnoxious to be honest. If you cannot accept criticism, maybe you shouldn't be writing. I stick by my review, I think the editing was careless, very unprofessional and really took away from the story. I would have been very disappointed to have purchased a book so full of typos. Yes, I know that many words are spelled with an "Z" in place of a "S", but you were erratic with your usage, pick one! Maybe you need someone to point out these inconstancies if you aren't paying attention to your own writing.

    As to why I did not correct the first nine instances of this so-called error, I can only say that I would love to—really I would (with the traditional spelling)—but I am not a proof-reader by any stretch of the imagination. I want to hire one, but finances do not allow for it at present. My main concern was getting my story out before somebody else came up with the same idea

    *****Like I said, you rushed to get your story out without editing. You should have at least read it over before you published it! To me that shows no pride in your work and laziness. You surely would have picked up on most of your mistakes had you taken the time to read it through at least once. Why not hand it over to a friend to read before you published it if you could not afford professional editing, no you were in a hurry to get it out and that is sloppy!

    —had you read Legacy, you might’ve grasped what I’m talking about here. If you were a writer you might have understood this need, but as you are not and are also seemingly incapable of empathy, I do not expect you to appreciate this.

    *****I have empathy for a writer that at least tries, you gave no effort. Like I said before, F7 would have picked up a lot of the mistakes you made, you didn't even care enough about your story to do that.

    Now, as I hope you have gained some understanding how hurtful if feels to be addressed a less than dignified manner, let me say this; I thank you for your critique but the abrasiveness, ignorance, and downright nastiness made it fall apart.

    *****Again, maybe you shouldn't be writing. I would suggest getting a dictionary and finding F7 on your computer.

    This was not a helpful critique at all. Until you learn how to address the issues with diplomacy, your review will go on my “bitter little person” pile.

    *****I have nothing to be bitter over, I would have been had I paid for a book full of careless errors. It seems to me that you are the bitter one and can't accept the truth.

    Doesn’t fell good to be spoken to so callously, does it?

    *****You're resentful and I understand that, but I wasn't about to praise work that didn't deserve it.

    Sincerely,

    Pinky

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